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    dots Submission Name: The glass is not emptydots
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    Author: slybee22
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    5.59 - 93/64/27
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Rant/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 381
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1092



    Description:
       I don't know where this came from. I just started typing and this is what my sub-contious gave me. me thinks I should read it and analize it but my mind seems intent on shatering my skull.


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    dotsThe glass is not emptydots
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    Be happy and smile, so I won't have to feel bad that you’re sad.
    Be glad; forget all the love you felt you once had.

    Don’t get mad, just hold it all in and insanity will be the best friend you never had.

    Life is your playground.
    So play!
    Then you can pay, for never quit paying attention to the decaying of your soul.

    As you grow old, lonely and ever so bitter, mask your regrets by lying to yourself.
    “I love my life things could never have turned out better."
    Be good to the one you settled for and hope some day you will feel love.
    Just don't think about your problems and it will all be alright, even though you don't want to sleep at night.
    Because the last time you slept you dreamt that dream you always dream, that dream of what your life should have been. When the morning comes you never want to awaken. Don't think about that too long or heard for gods sake remember how lucky you are to be living this lie remember at least the glass is not empty.




    Submitted on 2004-12-12 23:21:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      how do i say this without being mean? I wasn't even going to read this because I found the beginning ridiculas but then i read your comments and decided what the heck it's short.

    your rhyme is off the cuff and predictable.

    mad/had/sad/had (had and had? nice)
    pay/play/way/
    blah blah blah I rest my case.

    try harder.

    "As you grow old any lonely"

    did you mean "and" there? that destroys your message because the typo actually spells a different word entirely that could actually possibly fit into your piece.

    I suggest stop reading it aloud and proof reading it in Word.

    On another note the aping of YOUR comment was intentional. Yet the content of this comment is truely my own views on your work.


    P.S. these suggestions are meant to help not offend, good luck in all you write.


    peace,
    mister fizzle
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmmm.. well, I was interested in your subject. I don't quite understand all of it, but for the most part, I think I got your message. It was very original, and for that, I offer my compliments. You have a definite gift.. I liked this one ... good work!
    -Shawn
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
      This is interesting, and I found most of it to be extremely blatantly true. I like your writing style, at least what I've seen here. Keep up the good owrk, you seem to really know how to state something obvious, yet often neglected. I like it a lot!
    | Posted on 2004-12-12 00:00:00 | by Scribbles1338 | [ Reply to This ]



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