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    dots Submission Name: Sunday Morningdots
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    Author: mixedemotions00
    ASL Info:    24/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    6.26 - 574/377/69
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsSunday Morningdots
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    I woke up today
    to find the pines covered in frost,
    the frozen blades of grass
    glimmering a blue
    under the dark morning clouds.
    I rolled over
    to discover you werenít there.

    Recalling the way you held me
    last night,
    all night,
    I nestled deeper under the blanket,
    wanting to turn the cotton into your arms,
    wanting to bring back
    you and your sturdy chest,
    the best pillow Iíve had in ages.

    A rose hangs from my ceiling.
    Your wallet lays on the coffee table,
    and my socks are wadded up
    on the carpet,
    right where we left them last night.
    Our feet kept each other warm.

    I woke up today
    to find the pines covered in frost,
    a blanket of snow
    gleaming azure and silvery
    under the dark morning clouds.
    I rolled over
    to discover your heart,
    still warm in the protection of my loving arms.




    Submitted on 2004-12-13 01:41:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      MixedE,

    Don't have much to say about this one, it just gives me a big wet one right here.

    It makes me yearn for another winter in the northern hemisphere. It makes my heart ache for the kind of love i've been without for too long.

    But mostly, it makes me smile and think of the times when both of these things filled my days. Beautiful.

    Abzy
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by Abzy | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutly beautiful, Definatly left me heart in a pile of mush and thats no always an easy thing to do. My hats off to you, so much emotion...
    "I nestled deeper under the blanket,
    wanting to turn the cotton into your arms"
    My fave lines, mostly because i do that with my blankets too :D
    *sniffle*
    Blessed Be
    Krysti
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      I woke up today
    to find the pines covered in frost,
    a blanket of snow
    gleaming azure and silvery
    under the dark morning clouds.
    I rolled over
    to discover your heart,
    still warm in the protection of my loving arms.

    Goose bumps from head to toe...and I'm standing, clapping till my hands hurt...not to mention crying like a baby.
    Flippen BEAUTIFUL...wow
    So very touching this peice...it's perfect...no need for improvment...you've captured it here.
    I love being in love...and when it's clear and steady...you can always feel them there...like a blanket...warm and comforting ;)
    You rocked this one straight to my heart and will be a fav forever...THANK YOU !
    I absolutely LOVE it.

    Awsome write,
    Kelly
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      a very well done piece of work you did here, must have took you sometime to gather it all toegether into 1 you words are very reaching into one's mind , well done
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      The paralellism between the 1st and Last Stanzas reminded me very much of a Villanelle...lol, I love when they do that!

    Your wonderful description seems to peter out in the middle which I don't understand seeing as you have such wonderful images to work with. My favorite of which is,

    "I nestled deeper under the blanket,
    wanting to turn the cotton into your arms,"

    That is a feeling I know most everyone can relate to, one that you could embelish beautifully if you wish. if not, that is fine... Just a suggestion.
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by I_Bleed_Ink | [ Reply to This ]


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