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    dots Submission Name: .:She's Here:.dots
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    Author: Timmy S. Edgar
    ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263/200/71
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 849
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    dots.:She's Here:.dots
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    Sheís Here

    Got to know her today, it was just by chance
    What can I say, well tell me; is she the one?
    I know this she has such a beautiful nature
    Together it seems that we could have some fun

    She walked into my life when I wasnít looking
    And somehow now Iím thinking of our future
    Donít think that she knows how I feel, or does she?
    There sure was a spark; now that, I know for sure

    Hope to learn everything, yes learn all about her
    From her likes to her dislike and so much more
    See opportunity knocks and knocks generally once
    My opportunity is knocking and I must open the door

    Want just to tell her just how I feel, yet must wait
    Know deep down inside that I must take my time
    Get to know her one-day at a time, patience Timmy
    There is one thing I do know is, that this girl is fine




    Submitted on 2004-12-13 09:19:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      After careful thinking and pondering Ive decided that this is indeed my fave, as ive said to you its hard to pick because all your work is different and special in its own way. Thankyou for sharing with me your poems, and i look forward to getting to know you better and seeing more of your talents. This one gives me chills and fills me up with warmth, and if you can be proud of anything ..you should be proud of how your writing can have that effect..you made me smile :)
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      I know exactly how this is, haha, just the thoght of being away from this person seems like torture. and heaven forbid wait a couple of days before you see or talk to her again, you'll start to go crazy..lol...yeah i have felt this, but luckily i have gotten to know the girl i'm with better and what not.
    "She walked into my life when I wasnít looking
    And somehow now Iím thinking of our future
    Donít think that she knows how I feel, or does she?
    There sure was a spark; now that, I know for sure"
    I think that is my favorite stanza, because thats basically the first thing I thought. Anyways, good poem, i really liked it and keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by EnHakkore | [ Reply to This ]
      nothing better than the start of a realationship with real feelins there. i liked the way you presented these emotions. the flow of it was great! great write**
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      This was sweet. Don't you hate it when you are really liking someone and you have all of these messed up thoughts? Like short anxiety attacks. Love anxiety attacks. Dangerous situation! I like how you basically put your inner thoughts down on paper. The words that no one hears but you. That was great. Good job! Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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