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    dots Submission Name: So many warnings that she haddots
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    Author: shombray
    ASL Info:    18/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 103/91/26
    Words: 318
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I have seen this tragic event not only happen to women but to men also. I am not trying to be any bodys mom but knowone can be trusted when it comes to this subject so if you are unsure about your partner then make sure both of you get tested.It is sad to lose someone,but it is even sader when you lose them to AIDS/HIV.


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    dotsSo many warnings that she haddots
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    So many warnings that she had
    Thats why her story is so sad
    She thought it would'nt get to her
    But it hit her painfully in every single nerve

    So many warnings that she had
    That's why her story is so sad
    When she became a teen her mother warned her of this tragic event
    But curiosity got in the way and there she went

    So many warnings that she had
    Thats why her story is so sad
    In school they talked about the dangers of sex and showed it on a school slide
    But that did't stop her from opening her legs wide

    So many warnings that she had
    That's why her story is so sad
    Now she was an adult in the grown up world
    So many men want to call her thier girl

    So many warnings that she had
    That's why her story is so sad
    She knew the game that men liked to play
    But she went along with it any way

    So many warnings that she had
    That's why her story is so sad
    When she finally found the man of her life
    She felt like everything was going to be alright

    So many warnings that she had
    That's why her story is so sad
    She went to get her monthly check up one day
    But things did'nt turn out her way

    So many warnings that she had
    That's why her story is so sad
    She went home to her husband -to -be
    And said"Baby I must tell you something please!"

    "I can not marry you and be your wife
    And be with you for the rest of your life!
    You have given me a fatal disease
    They call it AIDS or better known as HIV!"

    So many warnings that she had
    That's why her story is so sad.




    Submitted on 2004-12-13 12:46:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the reputition really added great affect to the poem and the ending seemed to fit just a idea though is to go back in at the end of the story and find out that she didnt get it from her husband to be but from someone else since you made it seem that she had slept around before him it would add a nice little twist to the end of her story
    kristen
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel like their could be a better ending but the rest of it is just awsome my favorite part
    "So many warnings that she had
    Thats why her story is so sad"
    great write
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by Lucy L. | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a serious issue that so often needs to be addressed. Young people do think that it will never happen to them. Like everybody that has it thought it would. "HELLO?" AIDS/HIV is growing more and more. You can't tell who has it and who doesn't. This poem was good. Kind of off in rhythm in places but persuing a serious issue. Good write.
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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