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Here Again (Revised)


Author: arkay
ASL Info:    50+/m/Atl.Can
Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 450 /320 /56
Words: 40
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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A lot of misconception on the first write.
This should better explain my dilemma. ;)


Here Again (Revised)



Here Again


Every morning
When I awake
To my mirror
I hastily make
To meet my friend
Whose eyes of glee
Are always happy
Just to see me.

For if he’s not there
Then where am I?




Submitted on 2004-12-13 18:32:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You have very aptly and whimsically outlined every man's fear of not awakening and finding out that you didn't. I really like the lightness of this poem and all said in so few words.
Very well done
I am going to add this to my favorites.
| Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by popsit | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it. short, optimistic funny and yet a bit foreboding for there is a chance that u might not be there.did u ever think if udied even if tey put a mirror next to your face u would not know even if he is there u would not be. nice write.
| Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by whyme | [ Reply to This ]


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