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    dots Submission Name: A Midnight Snackdots
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    Author: eener
    ASL Info:    21/f/wi
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 351/370/53
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       This is a rather erotic piece; you've been forewarned.


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    dotsA Midnight Snackdots
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    I shall be your cookie,
    And you shall be my milk,
    As we dabble in artforms of nookie
    Beneath sheets made of silk.

    As moonlight gently accents the scene,
    My apprehensions become undone.
    Your body so temptingly muscular and lean.
    I hunger to feel that bubble gum tongue.

    As smooth as the taste of hot cocoa,
    Your hands wander where they please.
    You love the way I kiss you so,
    I love the way you tease.

    Sweeter than sugar those lips,
    Traveling slowly down my chest,
    While your ears receive playful nips;
    Our love for each other strongly expressed.

    We satisfy our partner's need
    At the same time, in the same means.
    Then, starving to commit the ultimate deed,
    Bodily juices mix as our kiss reconvienes.

    Loud moans escape from deep within me
    As we bathe in our own sweat.
    Our rhythm reaches a faster degree,
    With every delicious thrust met.

    Finally we reach the point of no return,
    And feel pleasure only lovers can feel.
    Staying locked together after, as our hearts still churn,
    Careful to be gentle after such a meal.

    Our midnight snack complete,
    We collapse in each other's embrace.
    Sleep comes easy and sweet,
    After ending a hungry lovers' chase.




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      very sexy sweet! however, the "bubblegum tongue" is straight out of a song by, damn, i can't remember his name, but the song is "Your Body Is A Wonderland." dont' know if you've heard it before, but i have.

    i like that you don't get too descriptive. after all, it's nice to leave something to the imagination!

    this was tasty!
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is quite erotic, in such a sweet way. Reminds me almost of the song "Sex and Candy" lol.

    It's like cotton-candy love. I just can't describe it. I've read some pieces in here where no holes are barred. Lick my this and suck my that. I think "thrust" is not the most subtle word, but we can't escape these things when describing that climactic act, so I'll let it slide (no pun intended)

    Fun to read, to say the least. Simply candy.

    Nice work.

    -Syl
    | Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by Stalking Sylvia | [ Reply to This ]
      (this was supposed to be part of the previous comment but I hit something, sorry!) This poem is a little more detailed (than 'Reunion'), and I think you did quite a good job on it. Your love and longing for your boyfriend is quite evident and beautifully displayed. Nice work. I think you gave quite a few people the munchies!
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by ber | [ Reply to This ]
      It's funny, because I don't generally expect such racy material from you, although we certainly can't forget "The Passionate Reunion."
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by ber | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great.

    It's cool to read this, coming from you, whom has never written anything this on-edge, and if you have, you haven't posted here at this site.

    but this stanza

    As moonlight gently accents the scene,
    My apprehensions become undone.
    Your body so temptingly muscular and lean.
    I hunger to feel that bubble gum tongue.

    is really cool.

    me being the male that I am, I like this. because it's about sex.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
      Food and sex go together so well...the sensation of eating sweets is so similar to the sweet nectar of love. I like all of your images...it doesn't feel dirty...but sexy all the same. The only one I would change is "sweeter than sugar"...perhaps you could find something sugary-sweet that's more specific...just borders on cliché...this was good...made me hungry though...for food actually.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]
      My goodness ! I've broken a sweat myself now...I'm off for a cigarette and a cup of tea. No sex please I'm British!

    That has to be the horniest poem I've ever read, wondering whether it was the nookie or the thought of all that food.. Brilliant poem..well done
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Sanny | [ Reply to This ]
      Not an easy thing to accomplish, using food as your choice of metaphors and making it work wonderfully. bravo for that.

    I got a good laugh and love the playful tone of it, mixed with the real feelings of love.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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