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Submission Name: instapunk dots

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Author:	poetsoul
ASL Info:	17/f/cali
Elite Ratio:	2.47 - 109/151/32
Words:	106

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	242
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	725

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instapunk dots

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you walk around with your dyed green hair,
sport your misfitfs and casualties patches,
beacuse you wont look quit punk without them.
flip off the stars
spit at the strips.
wipe away the blood from your latest
avoidable fight.
get wasted
fall into the pit
pass out and forget about this shit:
you hate your violence,
you hate your fake friends.
you hate that you know your only a trend.
it was never about this was it?
peace......noncomformity....
your lifestyle and values
are shot all to hell.
just like the rest of the world.
so much for noncomformity
is this your ideal of beauty?

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||| Comments |||
  Nah, material like this is unacceptable by my standards. This entire piece felt immature, judgmental and insultive. I understand that certain trends can turn a bright soul sour and that appears twisted to most surrounding spectator's but either way, it's an issue that should be dealt in love rather than scoffing.
| Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
  Really great. I love to go up to punk kids and tell them how cute I think their hair, clothes,etc. are. I am 58 and you can see how much it disturbs them that someone my age might not be shocked and distressed by the apperance.
| Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
  wonderfully written and self explanitory. i guess my favoorite line will be:"flip off the stars
spit at the strips." now that's original poetry! i like your style and the way you tell a story. deep, serious thoughts here. great work. look forward to reading more of your work.
| Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really great and i love4d the way it all came together ...Your use of words is fabulous ...I really love the lines
flip off the stars
spit at the strips.
wipe away the blood from your latest
avoidable fight.

Really really great ...Its a fave
Only thing i can pick is a fair few typo's which made it a little hard to grasp ...with "quit/quite" and a couple there...a proof read and its better still...But its hard when its your work sometimes because your brain see's what you mean ..not what youve typed ..
Having said that ...(i hate sounding like i think i know better ...Im sorry) I did really enjoy it ..and plan on adding it as a fave ...Some great little lines in there that make a big impact

Blessed Be
Krysti
| Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]

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