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    dots Submission Name: Experiment #1dots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       ok so The purpose of these two stanza is to begin a cooperative piece....I dont want feedback... I want the following stanzas... I want you to write them for me and I wanna put together the piece with what ever your minds produce!!!!!!!!!!!! whether I take a line or more form what you write who knows no idea to small or stupid! LEts see what you all have buried within you....Yeah Im nuts but I thought this might be fun!

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    dotsExperiment #1dots

    if you didnt read the description you need to before reading whats below!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Getting harder
    To let myself sleep
    So damn tired -
    I canít shake

    Iíll smoke another Cigarette
    Make another pot of coffee.
    So I can bleed
    The demons onto paper

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      I see what you've done. Interesting. Now another way to do this, instead of depending on the input of others, is open a newspaper, magazine, book, whatever. Take the first lines of paragraphs, or whatever lines you want if you wish to make it a bit easier. Don't try to write a poem, just grab the lines that look interesting. Look them over, let them stew in your mind awhile, a day anyway, then arrange them into a poem. You can title it the date of the newspaper. Like December the Twenty First.
    I liked how you did this,
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm, a challenge. Interesting...

    Getting harder
    To let myself sleep
    So damn tired -
    I canít shake

    Iíll smoke another Cigarette
    Make another pot of coffee.
    So I can bleed
    The demons onto paper

    Can't stop until they go
    Can't die until they're slain
    This thing that haunts my life
    This monkey I cannot shake

    It buries its claws in my back
    Bleeding me dry
    Wasn't it supposed the be the other way around?

    Eh, doesn't live up to you're start, but what the hey, right?
    The Theologian
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by The Theologian | [ Reply to This ]
      moments stand at ease
    as salmon sunrise oozes
    up in east. Another night
    meets the death of newday
    bloodshot eyes bleed
    the demons
    I crash exhausted
    to the floor,
    peace at last.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      ok, i'll try.

    "my hands shake as i write;
    squeeze the tears from my eyes.
    and as i look out the window,
    i can see the crumbling lies."

    that's what i came up with. i hope that you can use it. good luck with your experiment.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]
      ohhh, i really like the" so i can bleed the demons onto paper" thats a very good way of explaing the writing process. you have a unique talent, i enjoy your work
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by poetsoul | [ Reply to This ]

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