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    dots Submission Name: Friendsdots

    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 1217
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 806

       This is an old piece. I am lookin back in a book of stuff I found, might as well put this up, havent posted in an while.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    friends arent supposed to lie
    friends arent supposed to cheat
    friends arent supposed to die
    friends arent supposed to be mean

    you wanted me and only me
    you didnt want all that came with it
    like my friends and family

    you dissed them,
    then denyed it
    but I found out

    you cheated on my test
    said ti was your own
    and now I have an "F"
    I took it for you
    but that wasnt good
    enough for you

    you called me a bitch
    you called me a whore
    you called me a liar
    you called me even more

    n my heart your dead
    you are no longer there
    all I remember is all the
    good times we had
    but we will have no more

    Submitted on 2004-12-14 20:15:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      an old song ehh? well putting a bit of music in my head i can see how this sounds really good.. though it tells the story of anger and hurt.. some people will tell you that it's overrated.. yeah well they can piss off for all i care.. the simple fact is that if it happened to them they would feel the urge to write as well.. this seems like it made a good song

    lol though i do have to point out "ti".. should be "it" i think..

    well much love to you..

    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]

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