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    dots Submission Name: Violateddots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Lyrics/I hate you
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       Once again an old one. oh well, these onse were made a while ago for my badn that broke up about a week after we got together.


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    I feel so violated.

    You touch me,
    You feel me,
    And I dont even know you.
    You hurt me,
    You kiss me,
    And we are so realted.

    You were 13,
    I was 9,
    You were mean,
    And I was kind.

    Then again,
    When I was 13,
    You were 17,
    You grabbed me,
    And now,

    I feel so violated.

    So violated.
    So violated.




    Submitted on 2004-12-14 20:22:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeah i probably remember this more than most do.. i'm sure it made for a good song.. such emotion on that i know.. it is something that had to be hard to write about.. though your courage inspires me as always.. hope you have a great day today..

    much love
    Adam
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a hard thing to write about, one of my friends has a lot of bad stuff in her life to and she can barley express it. I admire your strength.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by Kacela Kali | [ Reply to This ]
      i just want to say that i am proud of you for speaking out. i hope he reads this. and secondly you know how to write, unfortunately things such as this happen all too often and no one ever knows, except the victim. and thats just not right. the violators should be publicly humiliated just as you have been your whole life dealing with this misery. but such is life and all i can tell you to ease the pain is: karma exists and it is real. everyone pays for what they play. i just wish everyone would play with good morals and some integrity. thank you, sincerely, -sinmore

    p.s. I BELIEVE IN YOU
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my, I'm sorry to hear that that had to happen... part and parcel of our teenage life, I guess. I'm a guy, and I've seen what some of the other guys I know do this... maybe you'd think this isn't honest, but really, I think it's sick to do that. I've seen how hurt people can get sometimes. Gives guys a bad label anyway. Haha, kidding...

    Anyway, this poem (or song? you put lyrics as the genre.) is a good read because of the honesty and sincerity of the words... also, the way you used the theme of violation here and repeating it several times but not overdoing it was also good. Good write.
    | Posted on 2004-12-14 00:00:00 | by zhi wei | [ Reply to This ]


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