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    dots Submission Name: Wavesdots
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    Author: dreamer
    ASL Info:    15,F,y should i tell u
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 107/146/39
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1011
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 309



    Description:
       this poem is about the time when me and my mom were at a beach,it was so much fun.we would run to the edge of the sea yell somthing along the lines of
    "is that all you got!" and when the waves came back we would run away trying not to get wet.
    this poem is simple and sweet but dear to my heart,i hope you enjoy it.


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    dotsWavesdots
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    I run to you then make dare;
    Take a deep breath of salty air.
    And when you start to rush tward me,
    From the sands I do flee.
    Then as fast and steady as you came in,
    You rush back to the sea again.




    Submitted on 2004-12-15 00:44:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it but I think you could have added more detail or length to it. I do like how it sounds and how it folws though.
    Random face for you.
    | Posted on 2005-02-09 00:00:00 | by Rail | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll admit, I have to agree with the last two reviewers in stating that it's simple (in a good way) and a quick, well-described read but just the same, I found it to be a little on the unnecessarily short side and dumbfounded by the feeling that it left me with as if there was a realization that nothing happened throughout it's progress.
    | Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      well i have to admit , its short , brilliant and as the previous friend mentioned , good to read and i've enjoyed reading it very much , thank you for your effort in putting such a piece out , keep your work in the light :)
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]


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