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    dots Submission Name: Bloodseekerdots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 799
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    dotsBloodseekerdots
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    The chin length black hair
    dances to the beat of the wind,
    as the cruor wings flap.
    and the ebony clothes swing.
    Pale skin, blue eyes,
    all there through the night;
    as the Bloodseeker screams,
    to the Blacklord,
    about unfinished dreams.




    Submitted on 2004-12-15 05:27:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it, the only thing that threw it off is the last line. but who cares its still good, lots of big words, and thought put out there, good job
    ...Solemn Star
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]
      Kinda cool in a short type of way well written for the most part but really short! needs a bit of expansion to make it really good.
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by ARCHIE | [ Reply to This ]


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