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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 907
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 821



    Description:
       This was completely written on the spur of the moment, it's probably obvious, but I didn't know the words until they were written.I don't really like it but it seems to be something that wrote itself and its not mine to erase.So tell me what you think.


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    She sits alone
    watches the walls around her
    they seem to be closing in
    She watches the phone
    waits for someone to call her
    but she's all left out again
    a day goes by
    another tear
    her bruises only whisper
    a month goes by, turns to a year
    and she's still alone tonight
    she keeps growing up but no one has cared
    she wants to scream but no one is there
    all alone she sits with a peculiar look in her eyes
    in truth no expression was there
    but if someone had taken a closer look or if you made her believe that you had cared
    maybe she wouldn't be living apart
    maybe she wouldn't be in pain
    because now she speaks only with a broken heart
    now she screams from an early grave




    Submitted on 2004-12-15 11:46:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what you wrote about sure isn't something that i would allow myself to go or be put through.it was a very effective piece about the isolation and alienation that most people aren't even aware of.good luck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my. I just wrote a poem just like that, well, the same emotion. I understand the pain. wow. You wrote on the spur of the moment? Cool, I usually do that, so its cool. The poem writes itself. Well, keep on keeping on. Peace!
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by thesacredone | [ Reply to This ]


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