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    dots Submission Name: You DIdn'tdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 918
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    Description:
       This is to my dear dear friend who has yet to write me and I told him not to promise if he didnt intend to because I didn't want to go through the dissapointment of lonliness.You knwo who you are you mexican.


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    dotsYou DIdn'tdots
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    An empty mailbox
    no one cares
    I look for a letter
    it isn't there
    I'm all alone
    so it seems to me
    I watch the phone
    it refuses to ring
    someting somber
    someone so pained
    you said you would write
    but nothing came




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      honey i hear you! i have a friend who is just like this. he hasn't written me or shall i say attempted to respond to me in any form for 2 months now. said he'd write me and never did. just up and left, at least i know where he is, but that doesnt' bring him back. it doesn't give me that friendship i want. my phone sits silent with darkness, looking for light. i wait for the day when he is in my sight. just keep thinking of him, things will work out. great write**
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem. It evoked a "aww" in me while I read. It brings out the emotion of sadnedd and disappointment, which was what I guess you were trying to get across. I enjoyed reading it, too, because it was straight to the point (short, sweet, spicy as they say)

    Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by Spriing | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece, it's suttle and "somber" but at the same time packs a punch that is noticable. your choice of theme was impecible... ooohhh I'm using big words...lol... keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      slight typo "someting somber" but i really liked it, especially "I watch the phone
    it refuses to ring" I think we've all been in this situation...don't worry - it. will. get. better.
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm certain that a lot of people will be able to understand what it was that you wrote about.i'm always expecting mail,some of which never arrives.it's also a painful experience to be lied to.you did a wonderful job with this one.goodluck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, i am sorry jazz that i did not write, i thought i would and i meant it, that i would, but i do not know why i have not sat down and forced myself..i do like the poam and the lonlyness it describes...again jazz i am sorry...ill talk to you sometime, bye
    | Posted on 2005-01-06 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]


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