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    dots Submission Name: My Baby Boydots
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    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 867
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    Description:
       *This is written for my little kitten who is now about 6 1/2 or 7 months old. he was found in a field his mother was dead. The family was going to kill him but my brother saved him, and gave him to me for a graduation present!* I would love to know what you think of this!


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    dotsMy Baby Boydots
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    You were born
    A few days latter given to me
    skin and bones starving
    for food and attention.

    We had to buy you special milk
    and feed you every hour or two
    You were always so hungry
    we all watched the milk dribble off your chin.

    You cried all night and
    throughout the day
    simply wanting to be held
    to feel a loving touch.

    Now you growing up
    almost seven months old
    a total terror
    we can barley hold.

    Your big around the middle
    as evil as can be,
    you try and play with the dogs
    who have to flee.

    But your still my little baby,
    my special little boy
    Tell me why don't you cuddle
    like all the other cats I know?




    Submitted on 2004-12-15 20:37:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was good and I enjoyed it at first I though you were taling about a son but its really good I enjoyed and thanks for responding to my poem HUSBAND AND WIFE. Well great write
    -christina
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]


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