Description: freeing oneself from burdensome relationships has a very addictive feeling...
Free Again -------------------------------------------
for this day
marks the beginning
of a welcome relief
from uncouth emotions
and unchecked love
to be thrown into
oblivious fits of
laughter and
fitting moments
of mirth
I liked this "oldie". The title tells it all, but your words ring different than the usual cliché tunes.It's nice to laugh once more, and walk without a shadow.
Too much emotional coin gets gambled away in the pursuit of love and lust,- this speaks with the voice of someone who has kicked the habit,-any bad habit, or someone who is cured finally of a debillitating illness. Another short, sweet and to the point piece, Sally
you have so nicely here captured the essence of the feelings of relief that come with ending something that is so unhealthy. i love the giddy moments when you can finally laugh and say,"that was close!" LOL
You seem to be on a mission to capture... Hmmm, how shall I say, not moments, nor emotions per se, though those too. Wordlike snapshots of feeling, thought, etc. Those little things that add flavour, that's it, its SPICE. You should publish a booklet with some of your spices to aid flavourful cooking of this stuff we call life. Very nice and compact too. Appropriate, as too much of any good flavour kills the taste. I like these. I do not visit your page often enough I think.
This is superbly written. Very unique to take something that is normally perceived as negative and turn it into a glorious celebration! Got to love it!
"uncouth emotions, and unchecked love", followed by, "fits of laughter" and "moments of mirth". Which proves the old adage, "Sex is the most fun you can have without laughing." Now, free of a cumbersome relationship, the only alternative is to laugh. It is almost impossible to laugh and not be sincere. If you can laugh, you can feel that you are truly free.
This poem is unique in how it expresses the "welcome relief" of a relationship's end. Not the ususal somber, sad, looking back, longing, kind of poem, but a happy, I am free, and I can laugh, sort of poem. Upbeat and different.
"uncouth emotions" is a great line! this made me think of someone dancing a jig as they extricate themselves from an unsavory relationship. i've been there, done that. no more! well done!
this feels like it should be an affirming statement of the day... found on the calendar or todays quote in the diary... i like it. its likes a marker... on this day in history... a guidepost by which to measure your world and what you do on your quest to untangle yourself from the mess of life... i really liked this
This draws neatly from the negative to positive side- why am I leaving? "welcome relief" from keeping my feelings in check, watching my back side, "uncouth emotions" yes, I hate that I hate you, but I do... "unchecked love" well yes, I do still love you and that's why your behavior has got to go! And it's well known that releasing a snake (as long as it has slithered away) deserves a garden party full of mirth, the need for celebration is obvious. Very nicely crafted, thanks for sharing, Nan
Ahh what an excellent piece. I've been unhappy for months on end and I've dreamed of a day like this. Currently I'm in an ok spot in our relationship but I fear falling back into the gutter again.
I have a suggestion if you were to ever consider a re-write or writing a similar piece, because you have a great talent for shoret sentences and such why not try a piece with two messages and the same meaning. THey have a name but I cant thiink of it write now.
Exp:
Pouring out my soul Agnst covered pillows Intercepted by Neatly disguised devils.
Twho whole thing spelling out pain inon each first word. My only rason for all that is because you do an excellent job at capturing something in such small phrases and putting a challenge on your wrod choice might be fun:O)
Submission Name: Free Again
