I'm yet to find a haiku that really has an emotional effect on me. Maybe i'm just a little bit slow in the emotional stakes and need a litlle more stimulus to get my emotional juices flowing. But this haiku came the closest for a long time. I could really feel your cold and isolation, both in a physical and metaphorical sense. It also produced an image in my mind, which is no mean feat in a mere 13 words. Overall, a successful piece of writing in my eyes. Thanx for your words.
So few words...and yet so expressive ...Id really like to see some more work from you ...I have a feeling theres a ton of great poems waiting to be read ! Keep up the good work Blessed Be Krysti
That's quite sad (the "feeling" I mean), the poem is actually kind of nice (in a grim, forsaken way.) When an author can accurately hit correct emotional notes in three lines like that (a REAL "haiku" by the way) then there's been something achieved. I'm not a big fan of depressing art but I know a well written passage when I see one...
it gives so much of an atmosphere of, no so much pain itself, but more as acceptance of a grave pain, if that makes sense.good write. i like haiku, spacy, wierded-out haiku, but still haiku.17 syllables and so much emotion, i love it~nahlij
Submission Name: Frozen
