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I knew a man, once His voice was always shaded with affection Every time we said "Hello" I could tell that he was happy To interrupt his day Just to speak to me We would talk for hours, sometimes About anything and nothing at all As we shared our lives with each other In friendship that turned to love There was nothing surreptitious His wife had no cause to fear Nor did my husband need to be jealous For this was not the love of lovers (Although we did share intimacies that many lovers do) But was, instead, a gift in a time of need for us both For him, an understanding For me, an unconditional acceptance For we helped each other to endure To become insightful To change our focus in life And seek happiness once again When last we spoke He could hear me only with difficulty And he mourned the ability To hear the nuance in my gentle voice His apologies were teardrops on my heart As I knew we had come to his end The tumor, you see...was pressing upon an ocular nerve He joked of losing his hair from the chemo and radiation As though he cared about hair at all The only thing that caused him misery Was the drifting away At a time when he was not yet ready to let go "I love you" were our last words He died that July And I always wished We could have said Good-Bye |
Great piece of emotion and very powerful death awaits us all i think it makes a great write though this was really good but then i enjoy your writes sandman | Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ] | WOW! What a beautiful poem, and a memorable tribute to that man you once knew. I love how the poem grows as the relationship grows, from someone to whom you just say "hello" to a lost "love". It carries the reader along, as we know it is coming from your heart. Though the loss is tragic, it seems as though both of your lives changed, for the better, and this you can always keep. | I would suggest one small change, "chemo and radiation' could be reduced to "treatment". I loved this poem. It was sincere, and told of a platonic love between two people that strengthened both their lives until the end. I thought it was beautiful. Phil | Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ] | WOW! What a beautiful poem, and a memorable tribute to that man you once knew. I love how the poem grows as the relationship grows, from someone to whom you just say "hello" to a lost "love". It carries the reader along, as we know it is coming from your heart. Though the loss is tragic, it seems as though both of your lives changed, for the better, and this you can always keep. | I would suggest one small change, "chemo and radiation' could be reduced to "treatment". I loved this poem. It was sincere, and told of a platonic love between two people that strengthened both their lives until the end. I thought it was beautiful. Phil | Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ] | Wow! That was realy good, i enjoyed it and it was full of emotion. The end i think was the best part talking about how he was laying in his death bed and you spoke with such emothin and told him you loved him, but didn't get the chance to say goodbye even though you were right there with him. I am sorry for your loss, but it made a great piece, i enjoyed it a lot.keep it up | | Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by EnHakkore | [ Reply to This ] | A very touching piece and I am sorry to hear of the situation with this affectionate friend of yours. With such emotion laced within the very word choice of this piece it made it that much more better and intriguing to read. I truly enjoyed this one, a very good write indeed. | ![]() -Geremy- | Posted on 2004-12-16 00:00:00 | by Geremy Smith | [ Reply to This ] | |