This is one of the best pieces I have read with such a free-flow format for some time. You portray such a bold message in diamond clear words it'd be a challenge for even the daftess person to misinterpret this.
"All these I-love-youís lost When what I meant --I wrote on your chest"
Great opening, and my favorite stanza. I have no words against this, good piece. Sorry I couldnt give you a better comment, but honestly theres nothing at al wrong with this piece.