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Hollowed Graves of Freewill


Author: Geremy Smith
ASL Info:    20/M/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    5.79 - 171 /145 /23
Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Description:


The beginning has no rhyme...but towards the end it starts to gaina rhyme...this was purposely done. Other than that, you can take this writing for what you think it means.

Comments and feedback would be great..Thanks.


Hollowed Graves of Freewill



Conceived on the story board
Of an anthem shattered Hotel
Descriptive eyes peeling
The bark of inner sanctity embraced

Calloused fingers dance
So timidly over the face
Lacking perfection
Eyes shaded with blood and grey

Forcefully churning the heart
Tongues latched against cheeks
Embedded with shards of glass
Showing the sheep what to adore

The graves of freewill beam
A radiance of brilliance
So sickening
A stomach turned sourly sore

Because somehow I lost my way
Fingers suffocating
My eyes of filtered decay
All that I’ve ever fought to keep
is all that I have to leave

There is something
I have to say here
--before I fade away

Forever there’s no tomorrow
Trapped in mirrored freewill
Yet we do this all over again
Gripped by routine circumstance
Worn…and hollowed again

All along, here I was told
That we could open up, so bold
--our eyes where in the safety dies
Because forever we will be
Yes, we will be borrowed
Hollowed again.




Submitted on 2004-12-17 10:27:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I don't get it. The title intrigued me as sounding like something good, but I think it's a little too obscure. Too hard to catch the meaning.

Yes, we will be borrowed
Hollowed again.

This last line is the only one that gives me a sense of what you're trying to say. (I think)
| Posted on 2004-12-24 00:00:00 | by blood heart | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't know if I quite understand the subject. But, what I got was that your eyes were becoming tainted by society? Maybe I'm wrong but if that's it then awesome. But, maybe you could explain it to me if that's not it?
~BCute
| Posted on 2004-12-23 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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