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    dots Submission Name: tear (revised)dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Some people think you should not cry
    I disagree
    crying is a way to feel free.
    Tears are water
    coming down like a water fall.
    The taste of a tear
    means you have fear
    having a fear
    helps release your tears
    tears are like crystals, cold yet so beautiful
    Yet they are warm as the sun coming down on a spring day in Minnesota.
    A refection of a tear is like a diamond on a girl you love.
    Don't worry to show your tears.




    Submitted on 2004-12-17 10:29:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that's a really good "self-help" poem And although I love the line "tears are like crystals, cold yet so beautiful" I don't really agree because tears aren't so chilly. I'm enjoying the work that you're writing...Keep It Up! :)
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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