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    dots Submission Name: Be Stilldots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       My mom wrote this in 1980, I really liked it, I never really knew that she write and then we found one of her old notebooks, I thought this was just great, gets better every time I read it.

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    dotsBe Stilldots

    Over and over and over and over
    This is a poem
    Why and why and why and why
    why, why, why
    I really can't assume the responsibility
    discovery and discovering and discovering
    word or not. why bother.
    yes and yes and yes and probably
    but maybe yes, yes,yes
    How ong can this continue
    No question mark? Forever or forever
    no no no no no no no and no
    but everything is possible even here
    so what if this won't or if it can or make no sense at all

    Submitted on 2004-12-17 11:39:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that's pretty cool, i know this is a "bad comment," but i don't know what to say beyond that. the redundancy helps add to its effect. it's wickedly sweet.
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]

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