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    dots Submission Name: The saddest songdots
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    Author: Njud_Gold
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 49/48/36
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe saddest songdots
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    Life cannot find a path to desplay
    A concrete wall or a portrait to lay
    The heart is weeping so loud
    And yet this quiet faces stare in proud
    What many dreams has fall
    darkness alluring the sweetest of all
    The saddest song, within this child
    Playing so quietly and mild
    So make no mistake to bother
    For the saddest song within, is a wonder
    That make men to crumble and fear
    Sitting in solitude to share a tear
    The saddest song, within somewhere..




    Submitted on 2004-12-17 14:54:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. That's it, wow. You made this rhyme, while not making it to kitschy. This was really mild, while still expressing the resigned sense of dignity and sadness about you. This just blew me away. Nice job.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]


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