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    dots Submission Name: prematuritydots
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    Author: Lightbringer
    ASL Info:    25/M/under your couch
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 188/210/36
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       inspired by my own insecurities and bullheadedness.


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    Can you smell it?
    The Pine,
    Smoldering beneath the hearth?
    Can you taste it?
    The brandy,
    As it sloshes around in the snifter?
    I can
    It reminds me
    of how young I really am.
    My bones
    They grow Weary
    and it seems that Smoke
    clouds my vision.
    How??
    How is it?
    That one can make light,
    Of the threat
    Of being considered
    an old fuddy duddy at 23?
    But alas,
    To each their own timeline
    And when my day comes
    I shan't lay in my deathbed
    Whispering
    Babbling
    And drooling
    Like a senile grandfather
    Who cannot remember,
    Who his children are
    Much less who he is.
    I shall pass into
    The promise of my fathers
    Singing
    Singing so loudly
    that no one within a hundred miles
    will be able to remember
    Who their children are.




    Submitted on 2004-12-17 16:21:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       You're going down singing - that is one hell of a way to go. It's scary, though, the thought of age (and you've got it at 23 - imagine how bad it will grow by the time you crawl along to my age...), and it is good to be resilient.
    Flaunt your youth young man. I'm sure you already do, judging by this work, but if you don't then I'm here to tell you you'd better. If you're not going out every weekend then do so. If you don't have an adventure to tell by the end of it then it was wasted... Yup, those are my words. I should probably say something on the poem itself but I won't;
    That's the Eggman way...
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by Eggman | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem. I know what you meen. When I get older I am convinced that I am going to sit on my porch all day and shot my shot gun at little kids when they pass by. I probuly will end up being a drug dealer at the age og 89. that would be funny, and then I'd find out that I was selling asprin and vitamins. lol
    Kacey
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by Lachesis | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem. fuddy duddys are people too and they come in all ages, shapes and sizes. I'm married to one! just kidding. this poem is very good.
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]



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