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    dots Submission Name: I'll be waitingdots
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    Author: morte
    ASL Info:    17/female/earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430/348/55
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 729
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1356



    Description:
       a song without a chorus


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    dotsI'll be waitingdots
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    If you need me you know where Iíll be
    Even though Iím the kind to disappear
    If itís alright Iíll just stick around
    I promise if you want me Iíll be here

    Iíll wait around for you forever
    Okay not forever, but awhile
    But in this place minutes feel like years
    As you can tell this isnít my style

    Youíre living life like a religion
    A religion I never believed
    Iím living life like a false pretense
    A lie through which youíll never be deceived

    Go ahead, let yourself be tempted
    It doesnít bother me to be your sin
    At least not all that much anyway
    Remember forgiveness comes from within

    Iím the kind to fight over nothing
    To make a scene while youíre looking confused
    Youíre the kind to always take the blame
    To smooth things over while I look amused

    Yeah, so Iím more trouble than Iím worth
    Iím the kind who blames everything on fate
    Youíre the kind who can never decide
    Donít worry, just push pause, this can all wait

    When youíve decided take a look around
    Trust me when I say, ďIíll be waitingĒ
    To watch as youíre lowered into the ground
    YOU F*CKING PIECE OF SH*T SICK B*STARD

    I love you





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    ||| Comments |||
      you should sing this to me so i know what it sounds like, ok...hahaha...just kidding...

    well, i like it. even if you won't sing it to me...i liked the end, where we find out that you are waiting for this person to die...it presents your hate well, but why did you yell at him and then say you love him? that got me confused. oh well, that is not hard to do. anyways, great work...
    | Posted on 2005-04-01 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought that this was pretty good and nearly died laughing at the last few lines. Great job. The flow was pretty good also.
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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