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    dots Submission Name: Lovelydots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 299
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Friendship
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1843



    Description:
       Ah. This one's for Matt. Be nice to the song, I rather like it. Sorry if it doesn't make much sense. It's the kind of song that you have to picture something going on [like a music video] in your head.


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    dotsLovelydots
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    Emotive face to hide your tears
    From reactive figures realizing what they've done.
    You play a hand game,
    you forget my name,
    you fight for me when I haven't won.

    But 'no' is not the answer.
    Even in finding no 'yes'.
    You don't understand,
    after these four long years,
    that your questions brought out my best.

    *So
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Leave the concert before we mend.
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Leave your beginnings at our ends.*

    You've made me cheat and told me not to lie.
    You've done my work for me with no sigh.
    But how is this right coming from you?
    Doing the things you told me not to do.
    Thick headed, word dreaded, so tough to get through.

    There's two feet between us
    You say you're acting just like any other guy.
    But I refuse to believe that lie.
    I refuse to run away and make you sit in silence.
    Everyone's got something to give, even if it's patience.

    And you breathe.
    And you see.
    And you breathe.
    And I leave.

    *So
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Leave the concert before we mend.
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Leave your beginnings at our ends.*

    And you breathe.
    And you see.
    And you breathe.
    And I leave.

    So
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Leave the concert before we mend.
    Leave your beginnings at our ends.
    Leave your beginnings at our ends.




    Submitted on 2004-12-17 19:51:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Another really amazing lyrics done by yyou.. Man I just feel like putting all them on my favorites. But I just can't do that. I am gonna add this one to my favorites. Because their were a lot of lines that I really loved and enjoyed. The chorus was lovely. Hhaha. I really enjoyed the whole thing. Same topic kinda of the past lyrics I just commented on it.. But I totally differant style..

    I completely love this.. Just like the other ones

    *So
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Leave the concert before we mend.
    Fade, lovely.
    Don't get it.
    Leave your beginnings at our ends.*


    I will read more of your stuff..
    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem definitely has potential as a song lyric.it was even somewhat mysterious which is something that i like.i hope that you have a good holiday.good luck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2004-12-23 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, but I think that it may be too nice for lyrics. I know a lot of people don't know the words to hit songs and it doesn't stop them from selling but these words are too lovely to hide behind loud music. I'd like to see you write a poem version of this too.
    Good luck, no matter what you decide to do with it.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      That's tight! I think I understand it. Like, he brings out the best in you, tells you not to do things you know you shouldn't do, but then does them to help you. Am I right? Anyway, I like it lots!
    | Posted on 2004-12-17 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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