Description: This was writtem for an English assignment, I wasn't thrilled with it but...whatever.
Do You See? -------------------------------------------
a vast sky spread before me
and you dangle hope in front of my eyes
freedom is an allusion to the extend of my diguise
I scramble for an answer
but fingers point in my way
you open your mouth to speak
but have limited things to say
promises of the future, free from any past
if I had never seen the sky, I have seen it now at last
my lips are chapped, my eyes are sore, my body feels so numb
I'm aching with anticipation but
this moment has yet to come
can you feel these things inside me
do you really realize
do you know the pain that binds me
can you really empathize
i think this is a superb poem! and pain is pain no matter what your age! don't stop expressing youself in your writing. listen to positive responses because you're a brilliant writer. adding you to my favorites too!
This is actually pretty good. I'm adding it to my favorites list. Maybe it's just the way the poem proclaimed itself so soothingly when I read it but I found it a lot more than just some "English assignment."
Hey good poem, i like this one alot...its pain, but it tells the reader how u hide it and somewhat let it show, at least thats what i got out of it in this way..well yeah, it was a little short, but it helps cause im not in the mood to read alot and so im goin now, ta ta jazz...