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    dots Submission Name: Alone and Afraiddots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAlone and Afraiddots

    tonight the moon shines a little brighter
    light is cast on so many hearts,lonely and afraid and falling apart
    placid water that I crave to disturb
    all my life its lain like it could never be touched
    I sit from my window
    so afraid of an entire world in the dark
    but, it seems to call to me
    and as I glide out, as I sneak up to the sea
    I break from my life and this constant routine
    tonight my eyes shine a little brighter
    for the entire world to see
    I am alone and afraid but now I feel free
    at the waters edge, intimidated by its wholeness
    I imagine my body swallowed by a complete
    blanket of shifting water
    placid and mocking
    it's time to move on
    I break the water
    ripples and ripples from one tiny place
    one after another
    on and on
    another cycle, these ripples go on forever
    and part of me will go along with them
    clound roll over the moon
    my hands are buried over my eyes
    I'm alone and afraid and its still dark tonight

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