Mature love is something else, that I can see why you would reference the Garden of Eden where things were suppose to be so much better. My idea of what love is suppose to be and what the Garden coukd have been closely mirror one another. I liked that and this was really sweet m
i feel like the last line carries everything. like krysti... i admire the weight placed on the back of simplicity... i admire the way it didn't falter. i guess almost everyone wants a piece of paradise and share it with someone.
Some nice imagery used here, and I like how you used the Garden of Eden in the middle of it all to sort of reassure the reader of your feelings. However, I do believe that some punctuation is required in parts such as:
So mature our love is easy In love true love for sure
This part got me in particular because the reader goes through it relatively quickly but really I think it should be taken a lot slower, so I think maybe:
So mature, our love is easy; In love, true love for sure.
That was the only problem I had with this though, and I think you did a great job with your feelings. Nice work!
You already know i liked this ;) ...But ill tell you again ...I liked the flow ...i liked its simplicity and the fact that its simplicity just added to the beauty of the poem ...
Submission Name: .:Garden Of Eden:.
