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    dots Submission Name: One Teardots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 785
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    Bytes: 556



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       Well that's just a moment i would like to forget.. but it is something i knew would be worth writing about.. -sigh- do as you like with it.. i know it doesent mean much to some.. but it is full of emotion anyway.. say what you will


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    dotsOne Teardots
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    One tear did I taste
    One tear caused from searing words
    Words that had to be spoken

    They were spoken softly as painless as they could be
    They were choosen with such care
    This was meant to ease the pain I knew would be caused anyway...

    I do not love you, nor could I ever
    My heart I have given to another
    It is for her and her alone
    I love her...

    One tear fell as a shaking hand enveloped a face..
    I know you love her.. I know you do
    I'm sorry




    Submitted on 2004-12-18 10:21:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Adam, this is really pretty. Another favorite for you. Heh, anything for you my love. -smiles- This is sad, and I am..not sure I know who it is for..I think I may..may just have an idea. But I am not sure exactly who it could be for.

    One tear did I taste
    One tear caused from searing words
    Words that had to be spoken
    -How pretty, I like the meaning behind this stanza and it just looks amazing. You have so much meaning behind your words, I wish my work dug down this deep, and struck some people like this.

    They were spoken softly as painless as they could be
    They were choosen with such care
    This was meant to ease the pain I knew would be caused anyway...
    -Yes, doesn't it always end like this? We all know what this is like, to say something, and not mean for it to hurt so much, but it makes the situation worse.

    I do not love you, nor could I ever
    My heart I have given to another
    It is for her and her alone
    I love her...
    -Who exactly was this heart given to? -smiles slightly- Hm, this is sad, but..I know it had to be said..coming from you..you mean what you say, and you don't normally say stuff like this, so you must have had a very..good reason.

    One tear fell as a shaking hand enveloped a face..
    I know you love her.. I know you do
    I'm sorry
    -Pretty. I must say, this is a very great piece dear. So great indeed. A favorite most definitely.
    | Posted on 2004-12-23 00:00:00 | by Crimsonpathways | [ Reply to This ]
      a riviting write. the me these lines were the most emotional in this poem:

    One tear fell as a shaking hand enveloped a face..
    I know you love her.. I know you do


    so sad! well, you have a winner here on this one. i really like it.
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      it's very personal, and to me it stands as just a piece about feeling than a stuctured poem. the elipses give it a relaxed feeling or waiting. some lines are a bit long and the rhythm is off...the first stanza is a bit too short, i think...emotionally, this one hits the heart. good feeling in it. good venting poem.
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by NoMoreGoodbyes | [ Reply to This ]
      a very emotive and well described glimpse of a personal experience. nice flow of rhythm.slightly confused as to the relationship of the reciever of the words
    | Posted on 2004-12-18 00:00:00 | by undecided | [ Reply to This ]


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