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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 834
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    Bytes: 610



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       this is me depressed and i feel all bad and this poem is shit but i don't care.


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    you say I can't
    I question you with my eyes
    I really need to heal, the pain you feel inside

    I really need to know
    why we can't just be real friends
    but you need me a different way
    but this superficial love is just about to end

    i hate that you use me
    i hate the hungry look in your eyes
    i hate the love you used to have
    and the fact that your pain is mine

    you are coming to me
    but you walk in a cold way
    there are so many things i am thinking
    but nothing i could say




    Submitted on 2004-12-19 00:29:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this doesn't suck...it's awesome. it all goes together fairly well, it doesn't jump subjects or anything like that. i loved the end. so if you think this poem is crappy...i wonder what your other poems are like...i shall find out...lol...
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by darkness child | [ Reply to This ]
      heres what I don't get. you say your all depressed and that your poem sucks. Then you post it for comment. To me it sounds like your writing for therapy. Thats cool but why not write it in a notebook and for your eyes alone?

    did you write your depressed sucky poem up here because you have a desire to be abused or a desire for sympathy? relation? advice?

    I'm not saying I think your poem sucks I'm just taking what you said and asking the questions that run through my mind.

    any explanation would be appreciated.

    thanks

    peace,
    fizzle
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this poem, yet i was lost, is this about a guy you wanna be friends with, and they tried to use you for more?

    or a friend who just used you, it was very nice poem over all!
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by n3cr0 | [ Reply to This ]


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