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    dots Submission Name: Joeydots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 999
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 785



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       This is obvious, a broken heart, can't get over it, can't make this shit heal.


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    dotsJoeydots
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    We sat on the pavement
    you brushed my hair from my eyes
    you sang to me and held me when I cried

    you promised a life with you
    but that was something you could never give away
    so now when you say you love her
    I am completely filled with pain

    I layed beneath your covers
    went shopping with you and your mother
    watched you skate with your friends
    and played Tony Hawk with your little brother

    I lost my innocence to you
    then cried my broken heart on your guitar
    and when Angel asked for your answer

    you said " I can't be with her"
    I bled inside
    and you knew I loved you so much
    I walked away stripped from your love




    Submitted on 2004-12-19 01:37:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OKay Rachel I am sorry for everything, honestly I have no bad feelings for you, thanks for writing on my poem and I wrote it to sort of try and forget about this other guy David, he kinda reminds me of Joey which is completely irrelevant but anyways I just wanted to say I am cool with you and the reason it hurt so bad when I lost Joey was because I lost an entire family with it, Angel was like my mother and honestly it probably bothered her more than me but it's okay because it all worked out for the best, if me and Joey hadn't broken up I would never have created all the art I did or get to know David. I really hope you guys are happy and maybe could be friends, if Joey thinks so much of you, you must be awesome.
    | Posted on 2004-12-27 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      im sorry for your pain..i know that i caused it, and im sorry. this was a really good peice, it had a lot of emotion. i hope things get better for u.
    | Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww this is so sad! I am sorry for your loss and your pain, I hope it all goes away soon and you find your true love to restore the love you've lost.

    -P1
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      man that is really sad. I love the way you speak so plainly and linear story telling here. It is very very sincere and almost exudes sadness. Definitely a heavy somber piece. I think it is all the little details that really give this poem life and I personally loved it.


    great write.

    peace,
    kam
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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