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    dots Submission Name: Drowningdots
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    Author: darkness child
    ASL Info:    21/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 195/266/48
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 932
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    Description:
       This is how I feel. Every. Single. Day.o


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    dotsDrowningdots
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    You're coming apart inside,
    Sanity's seams are ripping,
    Emotions aren't real anymore,
    Because everything is slipping.

    Raging torrent inside,
    Blurs from day to day,
    Until they finally ask whats wrong,
    "Nothings wrong" you say.

    Won't they ever understand?
    Why do they make you feel like nothing!?
    You've believed them for so long,
    Knowing now you failed at numbing.

    They don't care if you can't cry,
    But they'll care if you bleed.
    But in truth, it's a substitute,
    Bleeding is what you need.

    "YOU ARE AND WILL ALWAYS BE NOTHING!"
    It screams inside your head,
    And you believe it, suprised,
    To find yourself wishing you were dead.

    Eyes glazed over, struggling,
    To shut out all emotion.
    But you feel their eyes on you,
    Judging you with such devotion.

    You can hear the whispers, laughter,
    As you walk by, with your head down.
    You glare as they stare back at you.
    Alone, you try to survive, but Drown.




    Submitted on 2004-12-19 04:43:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tormentingly beautiful as always darkness. You are a very talented writer. Keep writing and I'm sure one day I'll be reading one of your books. I hope you find happiness soon so I can read how you view the brighter side of life. Good luck and happy holidays.
    | Posted on 2004-12-23 00:00:00 | by DarkenedSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very true poem. i see it alot at school when people are taunted and have to keep their head down! i like the way that people are refferred to as 'they' meaning that its not just some people inparticular
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by clowns in my sleep | [ Reply to This ]


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