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    dots Submission Name: Delightdots
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    Author: KrimsonReaper
    ASL Info:    26/M/Denver, CO
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 328/443/46
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 637
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1324



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       Written long ago, but dedicated to my patient one. You may use me as often as you see fit.


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    dotsDelightdots
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    It’s three a.m. and the night invites
    A sport to nurture the spore of guilt,
    Which causes me to arise despite
    The cold resolve I thought I had built,
    to fight in fright the biting plight,
    the bright exciting slight of night,
    the tight and mighty white delight
    That my conscience deems as wrong,
    And I’d abandon if I were right,
    but the Devil sings a careless song.

    Thus with passion refusing to wait
    Until it justly could be wasted,
    I’ll embrace the sultry, fleshy freight
    Until my hands have evil tasted;
    I’ll mate with nature’s bait, irate
    and hating late night dates with fate,
    innate with traitors’ traits to sate.
    Dancing now with my demise,
    I greet the serpent and won’t negate,
    yet know, all the while, the Devil’s guise.

    Aloof in the water’s heat and hum,
    I ravage the hunger’s pining pangs;
    The stab of my conscience overcome,
    I pray the siren to gnash her fangs,
    to stun and strum my wondrous son,
    and mumble cunning crumbs of fun,
    till, numb and dumb, I come undone.
    Holy spirits singing sweet,
    I see a child in the maelstrom,
    and hear the Devil in my heartbeat.




    Submitted on 2004-03-22 18:06:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow.

    I was so lost in the words I had to read it again because I didn't even think about the meaning. Sounds stupid but it's true; I know when something is good when I'm just marvelling at the structure of language and pairing of words. I'll suddenly realise I haven't heard a single word I've seen.

    You made a masterpiece about jerking off. All your pieces seem to be. But you made it a work of art, while never letting us forget its darker and more deviant connotations.

    Holy spirits singing sweet"

    If anyone has heard a better term for a climatic instance, let me know. That's best I've seen...
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaron,Wonderfully lucid write; the frenetic rhymes pulse perfectly --building momentum with skillful diction and creative allusions. The final lines are an exquisite lull after the maelstrom of emotion--
    "Holy spirits singing sweet,
    I see a child in the maelstrom,
    and hear the Devil in my heartbeat"
    so very soothing anti-climax-- inviting deep and dreamless sleep.
    Well Done , Silver
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm sick of clever people. lets get this over with.....................
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]
      Actually, Ghost, I just got laid last week. Which means that I am a bit behind. LOL. It's okay, though, I understand that you are frustrated. Have you ever heard of noitcejorp? Killme, killme. I know that you know what I mean. Hugs and Kisses...
    Your gnat forever,
    Aaron
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by KrimsonReaper | [ Reply to This ]
      Intellectual preoccupations are stealing me from provocation. Proper interpretation and I might assume you haven’t been laid in a while. In which case, summoning this beauty might be in your best interests. Seductively evil, seemingly irresistible. You better hope she is playing on your side. What the f.uck is with people and masturbation today? I swear to god, or whoever. Switch hit for f.uck sakes. I’m sick of coaching. I’m getting a guilty pleasure from watching this unfold. Kill me then. I’ve been waiting all day.

    ghost.
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]



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