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    dots Submission Name: Never Extinguishingdots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 481



    Description:
       This is written to my new "crush" i guess you could say. I think this piece reflects my worriedness. I am quite afraid of slipping into depression again. Anyways... I don't like the title and I'm a bit uneasy about the 2nd stanza.


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    dotsNever Extinguishingdots
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    A glance of sun
    A glace so exhilerating
    Seems to ignite the
    Dying fire
    Inside of me

    You eyes-
    The match
    And mine-
    The friction
    Might possibly force
    My heart to
    Combust
    In front of you

    The clouds move in
    Fog patches dwelling
    In my solemn mind
    I cannot handle
    the slightest mist

    The faintest precipitation
    May drown my soul




    Submitted on 2004-12-19 20:47:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think you meant other words than you typed but it was a very beautiful poem. I can especially relate to this feeling as I am ever having difficulty getting close to men. always am too afraid of the ones I really like. don't let it get you down. all will be well.
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh sis, I have some idea of how you feel. I can totally identify with the power of the eyes and just the entire beauty of love.

    This is indeed a beautiful write and I appreciate it greatly.

    Wynne Devereaux
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by Wynne Devereaux | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't see how you didn't like the title but I really really think it is a an extraordinary title. One I would have never thoght of myself, I liked the piece a lot. It really has beauty to it. As for your won troubles, I wish you the best of luck. Don't fall into a state of depression
    | Posted on 2004-12-19 00:00:00 | by Chicool2 | [ Reply to This ]


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