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Still As He Spoke


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 38
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Still As He Spoke


Sideways-
Wind swept.
Backwards-
Time wept.
Outwards-
Soft hips.
Over-
Small sips.
Internal
Wasp sting.
Fallible
Sure thing.
Mechanically,
All is fine.
Lips taste
Of mystic wine.
Falling back,
The wave broke...
All still
As he spoke.




Submitted on 2004-03-22 18:47:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  weeeeeeeelll......ummmmmmmmm.....words wont do it justice, ill just say its a fav. another great write....but that doesnt surprise me in the least
| Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]
  Ambiguous and disturbing both in content and style - aim achieved?
It's a doctor or a lover or both and the short stabs of the lines are the only clues.
Addictive odd.
Hasta,
K
| Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
  wow... it feels like i'm standing in the time frame and witnessing it all. It is different, but in a great way.
| Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]


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