Still As He Spoke

Author: Voodoo_Lounge ASL Info:    21/F/OH Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171 Words: 38

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Still As He Spoke

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Sideways- Wind swept. Backwards- Time wept. Outwards- Soft hips. Over- Small sips. Internal Wasp sting. Fallible Sure thing. Mechanically, All is fine. Lips taste Of mystic wine. Falling back, The wave broke... All still As he spoke.

Submitted on 2004-03-22 18:47:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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weeeeeeeelll......ummmmmmmmm.....words wont do it justice, ill just say its a fav. another great write....but that doesnt surprise me in the least

| Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]

Ambiguous and disturbing both in content and style - aim achieved? It's a doctor or a lover or both and the short stabs of the lines are the only clues. Addictive odd. Hasta, K

| Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]

wow... it feels like i'm standing in the time frame and witnessing it all. It is different, but in a great way.

| Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]

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