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Allow Me


Author: arkay
ASL Info:    50+/m/Atl.Can
Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 450 /320 /56
Words: 25
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I think my words are drying up.
I offer this tanka until I get lubed. ;)


Allow Me





Show me of wonders
Never seen on this earth.
Take me to places
No man’s ever been before.
Allow me into your heart.




Submitted on 2004-12-20 07:37:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a short but very meaningful poem. You have really said so much in so few words and even though it is short in length it is deep with sentiment. This is a very sweet poem but could be scary to travel to places unknown to man hee hee! Love can have a strange effect on some people, I have noticed. Yet, it is still a wonderful feeling to be in love and better to experience it than not I suppose. Just make sure you wear your seatbelt. haha! I dont believe I have ever read anything by you before and perhaps I shall visit again. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  A deceptively simple tanka, and theme.
Both sound so obviously simple...open your heart...write 5 lines.
Neither is easy at all, as most of us have learned through living.
I loved the earlier comment ...made me hear Cpt. Kirk: 'boldly go where no man has gone before'! ;)
Although, that's really depressing when you get below the surface of it; to have a heart that's never been fully recognized must be a lonely existence.
Thanks for a good tanka; I needed that.
Happy Holidays to you and yours, arkay.
| Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  hey
yes it is very simple and to the point .. thts obvious and absolutely unnecessary to state again but ohwell..
i liked it.
neways yer it is short but if you're like me it takes quiet a bit of effort to actually write 5 lines! (:p) especially some tht make sense and r enjoyable to read lol.

basically what im saying is tht this was a nice write.
although i little bit more wuld be a tad better.
but its funi cuz it doesnt seem unfinished.

gd write
love anoutia
¤~*~xXx~*~¤
p.s culd u comment on my latest write 'nostalgia' or 'your love can save me'? i would like some comments (:p) hehe

take care happy holidays!
| Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Clementina oso | [ Reply to This ]
  short poems are never bad poems. there ones you can enjoy over and over again
good job.
hope i see another of you works soon
| Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by kiki402 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey there. Simple and to the point, just the way I like it. As always you write things that convey an easy to understand message without saying so much that the reader becomes confused. Anyhoo...much love to ya and happy holidays!
| Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi I dont think its simple. Cuz there is message hidden in it if I am not wrong, if I am correct me.
A beautiful poem told in few word.
With lots of love
shabnam
| Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]


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