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    dots Submission Name: A Risk Worth Not Takingdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is to this guy that I really like, it is pretty safe to say he will never read it.I am afraid that I might ruin our friendship by letting him know how I feel, I don't wanna make him go away incase he doesn't feel the same.


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    dotsA Risk Worth Not Takingdots
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    I wonder while I am writing
    I could never say this out loud
    I am afraid of your reaction
    you know I don't ever wanna push you away

    I am much to afraid

    Is it a risk worth taking
    can I be content with being just a friend
    will I ever stop faking
    or will my obsession someday end

    I feel that you could like me
    let our friendship grow to love
    but I am scared to tell you how I feel
    because you might let me go




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      Hey - Consider the alternatives, say nothing and things remain the same, or you lose him. Tell him how you feel and you lose him, or things remain pretty much the same, or...

    Believe me, "us guys don't run" when someone says they care, we love the attention. I don't think you'll lose a friend, in fact, telling him may strengthen your friendship, and if he cares too, well that's even better.

    Your poem is too personal and emotional to comment, it is you,putting on paper what you are feeling, who can argue with that? Sometimes when we write the emotion is so great, that what's written makes little or no sense. I once tried to write a poem about a tragic loss in our family, but every attempt was awful, the emotion was too great. It was years before I could write a sensible poem about it.

    So keep writing, and talk to that guy!

    Phil
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great write. I have gone through this exact thing when i liked someone. But for my bf I have now I was afraid to ask him out at first because we were really good friends but I am really glad I did ask him because now we are friends as well as a couple. Good luck and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Celestial Star | [ Reply to This ]
      A good piece with good meaning.

    "I am much to afraid

    Is it a risk worth taking
    can I be content with being just a friend
    will I ever stop faking
    or will my obsession someday end"

    To in the first sentece should be too, I believe. And this stanza is good, but its the only rhyming stanza in the piece. It just kinda stuck out to me, seemed out of place if yah get what I mean.

    Still this was a good write, and words of wisdom...tell this man you love him!! Sitting and waiting and starting at the wall alwyas ends up leaving me more broken that if I'd had told the guy and he broke my heart that way. So take the intiative and go for it!!!!

    --Kayla
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      you know, I am older and still feel these things that you have put into words. wish I had the answer. sometimes it is worth the risk and then other times it backfires, so I know what you mean. very well done poem. my only suggestion is to reword the questions into statements of your feelings.
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      
    tak e these feelings and share them you might regret it latter if kyou don't. love goes along right with life. If you don't love and give it all up for one time in your life, truly you have never lived. Open up, and let this guy know you like him, as long as your sure yourself, for regret is more painful then a break up.

    As for your poem. It is simple, but conveys the ideas and emotions efectivly to the reader. My only suggestion would be to add commas for more pauses and don't use words like wanna, it makes the poem seem like you really don't mean what you are writting it takes away the serious ness. But anyways great write.
    much love
    kaity
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes the biggest risk is not having taken one at all.

    I know that you don't want to risk a friendship, but if you have a strong friendship it will still be there if he doesn't feel the same way. it may be weird at first but eventually that too will pass.

    best of luck.

    p.s. He'll never know the unspoken...and there is nothing worse then looking back at lost opportunity. :)

    have a blessed holiday
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      even though it might be hard to talk to this guy about it, you should. you never know what he'll say-it could end up how you want it. besides guys like knowing that one of their chic friends has a thing for them, it pumps their ego. good write. i would talk to him if i were you.

    Rain
    | Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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