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And Such Fangs

Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
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Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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i'm blaming the vicoden. :/

And Such Fangs

Every bit
Of self loathing
Rises in my throat.
At what he
Has done to me
And my knives.
"What have you done
To my knives?"
I cry
Upon seeing
The state
Of those knives.
"Not to worry,
My pet,"
You answer me,
"You've surely got
The most impressive claws
I've ever seen...
And such fangs!"
I look down
At these alleged
"Maybe he's right,"
I think silently,
my eyes
Filling with tears.
What a fool
I was
To trust one
So pretty!
A thief of hearts-
And abuser of knives.

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  I loved this. There is not a word out of place. This is fantastic.
| Posted on 2008-05-04 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this too. I agree with what love gone wrong said, so I won't type all of that stuff again.
| Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  truly twizted and gifted all in one. i love the inner-turmoil shown. and ofcourse the last two lines are the seem to have an erie way of doing that
| Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]

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