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    dots Submission Name: crydots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 561
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    Bytes: 391



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       a rough draft just wanted to see how poeple like it.


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    dotscrydots
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    It's alright to cry
    just let it fly
    Don't lie
    It's not a crime to cry
    neither do I like to cry
    yet it helps your mind
    you sit there and cry for help
    yet no one is there
    so you just sit there
    stairing in the mirror
    and wonder how I could makes this clear
    It's alright to cry
    just let fly




    Submitted on 2004-12-20 15:10:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      After a good cry *like the one I had last night* it does feel better! I think crying helps us get our emotions out even if at the time you feel worthless and confused like I did last night. I like this piece. Good write. :)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      For a simple poem with often used rhymes and such repetition....it's not half bad....the honesty and truth of the theme are it's strength. L5 sounds a little meter driven...I was going to bash this piece but it grew on me...and like I say...you got your message across...that msg carries the poem. Keep at it
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a great adviceful piece. Just let it go, such a great message. I really like the part, don't lie, because to me it's saying don't lie to yourself.
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by closebutremote | [ Reply to This ]
      good work, you are really on to something here, you should never forget that you have this knowledge it can help many, including yourself sometimes, you are a good writer also, i didn't want to leave that out.

    thank you, sincerely, -sinmore
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]


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