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    dots Submission Name: For. . . Youdots
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    Author: secret moon
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 687/427/57
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    Description:
       This is for a friend of mine whom I wish was more than a friend. It's something I like he would like if he ever read it, but he won't so it doesn't matter. I'm open to all thoughts, so just go ahead and hit me with them.


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    Like I said, Iím confuzzed.

    No, not confused. Con-fuzz-ed . Yeah, thatís right. Confused is something that sophisticlated. . . sopistilated. . . sotiphilated. . . yeah, those sort of people get. I donít get confused. I get con-fuzz-ed.

    And why not just get confused? Well, confused is more of a sodisticaphed meaning for chaos-of-the-brain -- you have a set group of emotions that youíre experiencing. Confuzzed is more like happy sad glad mad FURIOUS crying growling singing yelling jumping-up-and-down-then-passing-out-from-feeling-overload. Yeah. See what I mean?

    Itís a nice feeling, in some ways. Like getting high without losing a ton of brain cells. At least, I think you donít lose brain cells. I could be wrong though. Woo-oo. . .

    Uh-hum. Anyway, Iíd just like to thank all the people who put me in this un-sophisticlateded state of confuzzion. You especially. Life's fun like this. (Almost as fun as being with you. . . but not quite.)




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      this is playful and sweet and damn it I am so happy to read a young person writing something other than "I want to kill myself, my parents, their parents, the dog, you, ..." I feel confuzzed from time to time and I am 30. You tapped that young girl in me- nudged her, told her it's okay to spin in circles and act goofy and get high on horomones and people and giggle and blow dandelions to pieces. I think this is charming and perfect in it's journal-esqueness. I would rather be confuzzed than confused any day. Cheers...Magnolia
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      ah I see I'm not the only one that just rants from time to time... ;) nice to get a glimpse into your personal thoughts this way... this felt more like a journal entry to me and that's fine 'cause I always love to hear (or in this case, read ;)) what others think and feel about certain things...

    your confuzzed theory sounds to me like restlessness... I don't know *shrug* I feel that way sometimes too and I don't enjoy that feeling at all... that state makes me feel like I'm going down the road of madness hehe :) I don't know the particulars of your situation with that person but I'm gathering he is a good friend of yours but feelings inside of you make you want to have a romantic involvement with him... hm... if that's the case, yeah... I get the drift of your text quite well... personal experience for me... I ventured the romance venue with my best friend and it flopped miserably... to the point our closeness is vanished today... not a very great feeling... but anyway, if it's not the case, sorry... I don't know the details hehe ;)

    you have a nice way of expressing yourself... kept me interested with each line :) thanks for passing the time that way and sharing... I enjoyed this :)

    I also wanted to thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my posting... your impression was really nice to know :) I'm pleased you liked :)

    *hug*
    xx
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by Fiine Moods | [ Reply to This ]
      Confuzzed makes you sound young and weak, which is kinda how I got this piece to be absed on your dscription. Heart-ache is a hard bitter thing dear secret...

    "Confuzzed is more like happy sad glad mad FURIOUS crying growling singing yelling jumping-up-and-down-then-passing-out-from-feeling-overload"

    I think overload should be overloaded, but I absolutely loved that part! Especially capitalizing furious. A very nice touch.

    This piece is good, but...confuzzing, which makes it even better. Fits its meaning more:O)

    Excellent write my friend,

    -Kayla
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      Its nice to see that some people are happy to see things say the same, especially when I can't. You ask for writing advise? How can I give that on a piece that has no rhyme, no flow, and no structure? I did like how you used con-fuzz-ed because it seems to put things in a different frame of mind as I read this. But I think the whole write is too based around that one idea, rather than the person (who only gets a mention twice.)
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh heh. I know how ya feel. I like how you're blaming a person for putting you in such bad shape...and yet you're acting like its all fun and games...when in fact you're devastated by how [censored]ed up you feel and how much you like them. Even though theykind of [censored]ed you over...
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]
      I've heard that word somewhere once before *looks away in deep thought... returns to life* Yeah I know what you're talking about. But as your writing goes on it begins to lose the randomness, but it leavs on a big note, but not quite. And how exactly did you managhe all the different spellings of sophisticlated... or whatever. It confuzzes me... hehe. Great stuff, keep writing!
    ~Paco!
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Paconess1006 | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed the randomess, free-read-it-how-you-want-to-see-it utilized here.

    The explanation of your feelings, expressed further by your constant misspelling of sophisticated (I realize it was on purpose and always different).

    I enjoy reading free-writes like this more often than I enjoy reading poetry. Most poetry bores me and I barely make it through to the end of anything. Stuff like this I read without rhythem, without rules and without the need for "flow" and "rhyme."

    Anyways, it's a good feeling when you're confuzzed, at least in my opinion. But you say he'll never read it... make him. ;)

    Just be like "hey, look what I wrote."
    He doesn't have to know you're confuzzed because of him!

    Anyways, nice little writing there.

    Take care,
    Rob
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha...wow....that was neat! Where'd you come up with that idea?? I loved it. You want writing advice? Well there's not much I can tell you within the contexts of this piece but I can tell you that as aspiring young poets, I think we need to stay out of the clichť-mode...I find myself drifting back and forth out of that land...lol This write sorta made me feel like I was on a journey to that clichť land- your ideas were very good but some didn't quite strike me as original. Now the whole "Confuzzed" thing...that was very original. Good job! I can see why you said the things you did though, so you had good reason. But I do agree with you on what you said about sophisticated people and being confused...being confused is just too good sometimes...gotta reach down to that lower level of confuzzed....hahaha...overall, a very nice job. Write me something a tad bit longer and I'll give you a little bit better advice.I hate I can't say more.
    -----wandering
    | Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by wanderingpoet16 | [ Reply to This ]


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