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Now and Forever


Author: Akai_Ame
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I wrote this a while ago. It was for my Grandmother when she died. I wrote it because of how close we were. There is no rhyme to it, or rule but it is still really good. (or at least i think so.) So tell me what you think of it. But please be kind it was done a while ago. before i really started to write poetry. Anyway, here it is the poem that started them all. ^_^ ENJOY^_^


Now and Forever



Even though you're gone, I will love you now and forever,
All though there is a wall of earth between us,
Or maybe just a simple glass,
I will always love you no matter the distance between us.
To all of us it seems like the world has come to a sudden stop.
for when you went to god as he called you to heaven,
Everyone you held close was sad.
But we knew one day he would call to you,
And you would have to go to him.
Which would make us cry,
But we know you are happy because
"No Tears Past The Gate"
Which means you can't be depressed or sad.
But the sorrow of you passing will stay with us forever.
Just like our love for you!
but one day, maybe one day soon,
Or maybe one day in the distance,
We'll be able to see you.
But until that day we just want you to know
We have not forgotten you, and will love you for all time.




Submitted on 2004-12-20 22:19:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow its nice, your love is as big as the univese. I acn imagine if i lost someone precious in my life. i cant bear to life alone. But i am sorry that this happened to you, but believe me, tomorrow rainbow will come after today's rain. I like your poem, its nice keep it up

-garnet4david-
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it because of the emotion put behind it. You didn't try to aid the piece with flowery words and description but remained straight-forward throughout the entire poem. I think you should do more like this without a rhyme scheme. I think that you can really put behind it what you want that way.

Kenji
| Posted on 2004-12-24 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]
  I can imagine the day my gandma dies from reading this, I about cried. The only thing I see that is easily fixed in the line with 'or sad'. Its not really needed with depressed right in front of it. But either way, it makes a good memory.
| Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Paconess1006 | [ Reply to This ]
  Sorry guys...i can't believe i put the poem where the description was to be and the description where the poem should have been. you will have to forgive me..it is late at night and i have been running all day with 3 hr of sleep and have been taking care of my 6month old cuz..anyway, i fixed it. hope you like it..

Ja
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| Posted on 2004-12-20 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]


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