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Sheets and Silhouettes


Author: Geremy Smith
ASL Info:    20/M/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    5.79 - 171 /145 /23
Words: 150
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Eh I don't feel like describing...it's a poem let it speak to you instead of me speaking for it...enjoy and any feedback is readily welcomed.


Sheets and Silhouettes



Cradled in sheets of dismay
Pull them over my face
To blot out these shades of anger and grey
Amber and ashes brush over,
the blanketed form of silhouetted tears

As if this (I) need you now
More like yesterday
Or every other day,
spread between and slipping,
through thorn intoxicated fingers

Bury a face into the pillow,
that slowly turns these tears to ash
Don’t wake up
Just can’t pull this away
Frustration dancing idly upon the brow

Pencil smashing,
and the lead spreads like poison…

Dear Black Goodbye,
I write this now
Thanks for the frustration,
and puppet strung tears
All the limitation,
and lies you made me fear
Don’t forget to write

--The sickened one

Wake up now
Maybe it’s over
Just tell me…”It’s ok to die”
Keep singing the lullaby
And now it’s over…

“It’s ok to die.”




Submitted on 2004-12-21 09:54:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  awesome poem, it does sound like life not worth it and it does feel like that sometimes,
The line "it's ok to die" is very strong, and I really think that was a great ending for the poem
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
  Wake up now
Maybe it’s over
Just tell me…”It’s ok to die”
Keep singing the lullaby
And now it’s over…


AGH! GOOD GOD! IS IT POSSIBLE FOR YOU TO WRITE A BAD POEM? No...I'll go ahead and answer that for you. God...this stanza like...is exactly the way I feel sometimes. Like I think I've said something like this to someone before actually. In one of my more dark times. God...I like your work...seriously a lot...again. You're Bloody Awesome.
~BCute
| Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  There is a lot of feeling in this...I know what you are going through... The message i see in this is basically suicide...Suicide is for the weak... Suck it up and deal with your problems...I dont mean to sound harsh...But that is the facts... But this is quality stuff here...Good job on this and i will look forward to more from you...
.Caleb.
| Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by Exquisite_Death | [ Reply to This ]
  Good write. It sounds like you want to fold, let me tell you folding is not the way to go. You leave behind too many people who need you or that you can help.
It's a good poem. I feel this on a daily basis. Don't give up...things will get better, it just takes time.

Rain
| Posted on 2004-12-31 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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