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    dots Submission Name: What happens....dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       have really messed up life right now.just venting little bit.


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    dotsWhat happens....dots
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    What happens when neither of your parents wants you?
    They get a suicidal kid
    They wonder why I act like this
    I act like this way because have two parents that don't care.
    They always say the world isn't fair
    Why should I care?
    I'm like a tear in some old pants
    you abused them and then you just trough them out on the curb.
    Always expected to do your work.
    sitting in the bathroom stabbing myself with a the fork.
    This is what happens when you neither of your parents want you.




    Submitted on 2004-12-21 10:47:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is a lot of anger present here... I am going through this same [censored] man... Dont sweat it...Things are going to get better...It doesnt matter if your parents want you or not...Thats their fault...What matters is that you are here...Suicide is not the answer... Just try to find another way of taking care of this pain you feel...Talk to some close friends...If you have none..than just talk to me...I can help you out...This is a nice writing...keep up your good work...
    .Caleb.
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by Exquisite_Death | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece really gets to me, being a loving father of one son, I really hate parents that do not take a true interest in thier children, nor are willing to take the time to actually raise them right and share the positive and beautiful things that come from such a relationship. I believe in one thing, always have and always will.
    That just about all the problems in the world come from one simple but deep truth...A child was not shown love.
    So when they grow ..we become the "problems" or we have a problem..lets medicate them..lets commit them to psycho wards...lets ..lets..lets not have to deal with them or love them..I mean we only had them right? Not our responsibility...
    Anyways..sorry for the rant, but this work sends a message to me of someone crying out, hurt, and it angers me so that parents even do this to thier children.
    ALan
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]


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