First of all, the description you gave to explain what it meant ... as well as the title was alluring. It definitely made me read the whole thing.
Second, the concept was portrayed beautifully. The desciptions ... the imagery ... I thought came across effectively.
My only complaint? ... the flow was kind of off. I'm not sure if it was just the way I was reading it, but some of it flowed really well and then other times I had to stop and re-read what I just read ... which puts a damper on my comprehension ... in my opinion.
For a poem that no one has commented on (or at least when I started to write this) this is a great piece of writing, and I really enjoyed it, and the title instantly attracted me. The relation to swans was good because they are known for their elegance and ravens for other things. The fact that its Raven gives this a rather dark feel to it, and seeing as their is nothing about suicide, this was pleasant to read.
However, I don't see why the whole thing has to be in intalics and Lion King be normal. Shouldn't it be the other way round? As it stands, I think reading this is a little harsh on the eyes because it slants and so think the other way round would be better. Also, you use an odd structure throughout, so I think a little more organisation (only of the format) could do some good, because right now, it looks like random thoughts.
Despite all I have said, this write made me think a lot more than most writes, and the title, as I said, was brilliant. I think you have done a great job with the words of this piece, and so I think that calls for a favourites addition. Brilliant write!
Wow. Usualy I would be very lost by this poem, but dont worry, its not hard to loose me, but I think you had just the right mix of words for me, so I could understand. I realy liked it, and I'm sorry, but I dont have a lot to say to help you make it better. To tell you the truth, I dont think it can be made better.