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    dots Submission Name: Can this be is it really me?dots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsCan this be is it really me?dots
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    Look at you looking back at me,
    You with those sad pathetic eyes.
    Can this be, is it really me?

    Look at you looking back at me,
    Your eyes fill with tears,
    They fall down running in a stream.
    Can this be is it really me?

    Look at looking back at me ,
    trying so hard to smile,
    Trying so hard not to show world how you really feel.
    Can this be is it really me?

    Look at you looking back at me,
    Trying so hard not break down,
    Trying so hard to remain strong.
    Can this be is really me?

    Look at you looking back at me,
    Pretending everything is ok,
    Pretending you can easily say good bye.
    Can this be is it really me?

    Look at you looking back at me,
    As you close your eyes tight,
    Praying to the lord for these chains of lies to be banished, gone forever.
    Can this be is it really me?

    Look at you looking back at me,
    As you to soon be free,
    Free from this dungeon of memories.
    Can this be is it really me?

    Look at you looking back at me,
    Looking into your eyes,
    Watch the story playback,
    like a broken record over and over it goes.
    Can this be is it really me?




    Submitted on 2004-12-21 16:04:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      absolutely loved it and btw you could so put it to music and have it be a cool song but thats just me. i liked this part the best:Look at you looking back at me,
    As you close your eyes tight,
    Praying to the lord for these chains of lies to be banished, gone forever.
    Can this be is it really me?
    | Posted on 2004-12-23 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      fix the title...And I've got SOME suggestions..not many because I really liked the poem.
    Can this be i it really me? <A lot of the time you said this..there was something wrong in each one- in this case you put 'i' instead of 'is'.
    You don't have to, but I think it would be easier if each time you said that...you could break it off into a new stanza.
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by BenevolantWords | [ Reply to This ]
      Your Poem was Great...It really Touched me...
    Look at you looking back at me,
    Trying so hard not break down,
    Trying so hard to remain strong.
    Can this be is really me?
    Look at you looking back at me,
    Pretending everything is ok,
    Pretending you can easily say good bye.
    Can this be is it really me?

    that had to be my favorite part.
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by Yella_Bone05 | [ Reply to This ]
      There are times that I gaze upon my reflection in the mirror and think "who is this girl? Is this what I've become?" and that is the same feeling I got from this write.

    I'm not sure if that is what you were trying to get the reader to think or see. but that is what I came away with.
    | Posted on 2004-12-21 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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