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    dots Submission Name: a poem written about medots
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    Author: srcastic1
    ASL Info:    18/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 96/97/28
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 968
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 745



    Description:
       This was written for me by someone I genuinely respect and care for. I don't care how sappy you guys think this is, I thought it was great. But I was just curious as to what you think of it as I suppose my review could be a bit biased.


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    dotsa poem written about medots
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    Long dark hair covers her gentle face.
    It waves hello to me when I need a friend.
    Her voice always leaves an unreplaceable space
    in my heart. Her giggle seems to have no end.
    She speaks to me as if I've always known her.
    Everything from her history with rabbits
    To how she hates cats and the way they purr.
    I'm lucky to find such comforting habits
    In which to take solace. I know what I want, though I won't admit
    I'm terrified by what I enjoy in this.
    I just need some time to see if it fits.
    To build trust again, and let go of the myth.
    Goodbye to my past, bring in the new.
    What better girl to start with than sweet Vanessa Moon.




    Submitted on 2004-12-22 01:20:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, I always read the discription of the poem fisrt which makes a huge difference in this one, and I want to say something first; I think If someone reaceived a poem written for him/her he/she must feel great about it and flattered too whether this poem is real good or not, because someone somewhere wrote it just for you and that means alot (At least in my point of view).

    So I don't know what to say about this poem because I think I'm biased too, I'm biased to the idea of writing a poem and dedicate it to someone and then give it to them.

    I liked the last part "The finale"

    "I just need some time to see if it fits.
    To build trust again, and let go of the myth.
    Goodbye to my past, bring in the new.
    What better girl to start with than sweet Vanessa Moon."

    Anyway Sorry for being biased and Good luck.
    | Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      wooooohoooo! Vanessa, some one is in love with you and he found the perfect words to start off with darling and they are beautiful. U cd be a bit biased but i loved the poem.
    | Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]


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