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    dots Submission Name: The Commuterdots
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    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 385
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 855



    Description:
       This is about a commuter who waited for seconds, minutes, and hours before the bus arrives...well, in the aspect of a performer that is.


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    He just stood there
    Amidst the plains of anticipation
    Not a blink, not a movement
    He remained firm on his ground

    The blinding rays
    Casting down on him
    A spotlight on his stage
    That witnessed his character

    He eyed his audience
    and felt their whispers
    Their scorching mockery
    Echoed through his skin

    Deprived of attention
    He did not submit to them
    Eyes fixed at a distance
    To avoid their lifeless gaze

    Desperation crept into his veins
    As the sound of nothingness prevailed
    He shuddered beneath his sweat
    Longing for deliverance

    Seconds of breathing
    Minutes of impatience
    Hours of anxiety
    But all he needed was a moment

    Just a moment.




    Submitted on 2004-12-22 06:18:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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