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    dots Submission Name: Sorrydots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I just wrote it's of those random things. Sorry if it makes no sense. ZZBut please give back any honest feedback. thanks


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    dotsSorrydots
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    I'm sorry to hear you're leaving,
    Sorry to say good bye
    Wish you didn't have to go.
    You turn your back
    Walk out the door
    Never to return again.
    I'm sorry to say this but,
    I feel no saddness
    No tears to come.
    I feel no anger
    No pain or hurt.
    I'm sorry to say this but,
    I feel relieved,
    Kind of free,
    A sudden hit of joy has come over me.
    I'm sorry if this hurts you,
    Makes want run and hide,
    Maybe even cry.
    But the truth is the truth,
    Nothing is to change it.




    Submitted on 2004-12-22 10:36:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this. i know so many people with this feeling and strangely enough it all centers around one person. this is wroded beautifully it reminds me of a breakup that happened between two of my freinds. the girl made this huge deal about how much yhe supposedly urt her when he was the best guy ever and he was all fine then leave see if i care and it was very sitcomish i guess. owell thats my soap opers for the day. theres a reason why i stick to poetry and not short stories.
    | Posted on 2004-12-23 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      lol well kinda funny but I thought of how I felt when I left my ex husband when I read this. Guess me and wannabe1 have something in common.

    The emotion was a little spoon fed but I still liked it, it was truthful and seem to come from the heart. the only thing though is I think you left "you" out in "Makes want run and hide"

    Have a blessed holiday
    | Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      boy, this hits the nail on the head. dont you hate when you know people expect you go fall apart and it just isn't there. This is a very truthful poem, wonderfully worded, and all so true. I think the one line you wanted was
    "makes you want to run and hide"
    p.s. reminds me of when my ex-husband moved out.
    | Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]


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