Dirty little sex type thing

Author: manicsmuse ASL Info:    28 Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 146 /161 /55 Words: 86

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Dirty little sex type thing

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I'm soaking in the heat of your lust. I love to wrap myself around your manhood. Your brown sugar taste is at my fingertips, And I will not hesitate to lick you up. You wiggle your way around my swollen peach And I can't wait to make it peaches and cream. I knew this would be good, but, I did not know I would love you in the end. I never thought I would say I do. But now I get to come forever with you.

Submitted on 2004-12-22 14:40:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Mwa-ha-ha! Thys was funny. Peaches and cream... lolfull! and then you got all lovey at the end! The end of a poem called 'Dirty little sex type thing' and you get all emotional at the end. Don't do that! Lol! That's when the drrrty sex goes badd! Peace, love and massive heart failure- ~#6-

| Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]

uhm...interesting:). The title was what intially caught my attention. Not a bad poem at all, though it was quite brief, I think you can elaborate more. But I know what its like to just start writing, than have a block. any who. I like this peice, it's almost X rated:P

| Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]

The thing I like most about this poem is that you kept it clean. Yet, you very well got your point across. This was excellent. It is hard to write a good passionate poem that doesn't go overboard and you definitely didn't go overboard. You gave erotic feeling with clean converstation. Good job. Alicia

| Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

hey! How ya doin lil Kim? Sounds like a ghetto esque rap lyric. I like the poem, but I feel like your contributing to the subjectification of women. Submitting to a man's cock because you know that's what he wants. Anyways, just my opinion.

| Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by kristiana | [ Reply to This ]

Hmmmm... Did it just get a little... "steamy" in here? Naw... well maybe. It startled me for a sec. but I did enjoy this very erotic piece, keep coming with it! ~Paco!

| Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by Paconess1006 | [ Reply to This ]

This is a very sensual peice of writing... It's a good portrayal of the ecstasy that one feels when having sex... Nice work in your descriptions too... You wiggle your way around my swollen peach And I can't wait to make it peaches and cream. Keep on writing. .Caleb.

| Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by Exquisite_Death | [ Reply to This ]

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